如何正确对待雅思作文的参考范文？
范文虽好，但不是自己写的。你可以学习他的谋篇布局。还有他的好词好句。最主要的是必要的时候你可以把一些重要的句子给背下来。然后通过改编，再用上去，这样就完美了。
雅思大作文
因为我并非教育界人士，所以无法给你评分，但可以替你更正文章的错漏，希望会对你有所帮助。
Some people think that increasing business and
cultural contacts have a positive influence, and others think that it has a negative
effect to national identities. What is your opinion?
正文:
I would admit (要加that) the contact between different
countries have risen rapidly, and whether it (加is) a good news for our(是us) human beings is
under discussion for it is really a complicated and significant problem in the coming
wave of globalization.
With the trend of frequently connect to each
other, the world exposed (a quiet应该是: quite a) new atmosphere for business or cultural development.
In this condition, countries show their own advantages and endeavor to make more
profits. As a result, (去掉a) work can be separate into small pieces(改为lots会更好, for example, we
will found a computer which (the) keyboard is是(was) made in China,
screen is(是was) made in Japan and with it's Germany battery.
Without doubt, globalization seems play(是playing) a remarkable
role in the culture evolution, although we recognize that different nations possess
its(是their) particular culture(s), which anthropologists indicated “local knowledge”, we could
not deny (加that) it gives the harsh impacts to those developing countries.
The acculturation among countries and nations
may lead the (develop of cultural 应该是: development of culture 或 cultural development) into a new degree which (加would) board(是boarden) the understanding
of human, society and nature, and those views in special aspects other than domestic
scholars or even totally opposite theories make great controversies in scholars
is better to enrich the knowledge.
One big point we should not neglect is that
the unequal position between developed countries and developing counties, as I have
concerned, globalization definitely a harsh impact, which meant they should make
a proper balance in learning from others and inherent (加their) own traditions. Therefore
the national identities seem less referred, and what’s more, people are willing
to accept modern civilization and feel shame about our(改为their own) culture. Such as today's
China, a lot of teenagers abandoned those 5,000 years' history and culture carelessly.
We are not living in a(an) isolated island and
there's no chance go(going) back into(要改为: to) thousand years ago when people just live in one
place (all 要改为: their entire) lifespan. After all, when facing (加with) the positive (changes benefits 要改为: benefit of changes) from the
intimate(intimately) associated with other communities worldwide, we won't forget our nationality and heritage from the(our) ancestors.
